自己写的作文 希望 高手给指下错

自己写的作文 希望 高手给指下错
Directions:For this part,you are allowed 30 minutes to write a composition to recommend a particular brand of bread for use in elementary schools in a small city.Support your choice with information from the chart below.You should write at least 120 words.
Quality of Taste Nutritional Rating Cost per pound
Brand A ★★★★ ★★★★ $ 0.86
Brand B ★★★ ★★★ $0.79
Brand C ★★ ★★★★ $0.41
Brand D ★★★★★ ★★ $0.40
Excellent Very Good Good Fair Poor
★★★★★ ★★★★ ★★★ ★★ ★
In my option,the brand A of bread is the best choice in the all.From a investigation in the elementary school in a small city,we can kown it.Fristly,the brand A of bread's quality of taste is very good.Some people must say the brand D of bread's is excellent.secoudly,we should thing about the next merit of the brand that it has high nutritionalrating.Meanwhile,peopele may notice the prize.The brand A of bread has the most expensive of all,but I feeling the prize is not important than other outstanding.Majority person kown that higher prize can buy better goods.Comparing all of the brand,the brand A is outstanding.Not only the quality of taste,but also the nutritional rating,the brand A is best of all.In a word,the brand A of bread is ideal.
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