When the first time I read thisbook/watch this movie, I was totally carried away in this book/movie that Ididn’t even he

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When the first time I read thisbook/watch this movie, I was totally carried away in this book/movie that Ididn’t even hear my mother’s call for dinner.
请问这句话有语法错误吗.特别是.【When the first time I read thisbook/watch this movie】这里

“when the first time”,这种错误是比较常见的用汉语的思维去翻译英语.the first time就是本身就是连词了,前面不需要加when.其他无误.