把我改作文：Great changes in my hometown

把我改作文：Great changes in my hometown
个位英语高手给个分数,然后把我改一下,本人高三（不好意思水平很烂,在冲刺阶段,英语更加要充实）
Great changes in my hometown
I remember when I was a child ,my hometown was only a small city, And the fields were not far from my home. So if you want ti have a good breath, you could walk to that fields for having a good breath.
Now, about 15 years ago, my hometown has great changes. For example:every fields were changed into the big buildings ,and there are more and more cars across on the street here and there. But if you want to relax and have a good breath,you’d better to find the fields from the city edge..
I’m pleased to have this developed hometown, but I’ll never forget the home which was clean and beaut before then.
一定要先给个分数,我估一下我月考的分数!谢谢!
总分就是15分!