谁能帮我改一下英语作文?

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谁能帮我改一下英语作文?
Eric Chien and Yueyue Sai are both my volleyball coach.They all are good at volleyball,and both have nice personalities.And are both very nice and excellent coaches for coaching the volleyball team.
First of all,Eric is an awesome person,usually smiles most of the time,even if he isn’t really in a good mood.However,Yueyue doesn’t smile as much as Eric,and she expresses her feelings in her talks and motions.But they are all nice coaches which make all of us on the team to become better at volleyball and better teamwork.
Secondly,they are clement,active,and friendly to all the others.Eric is the captain of the varsity volleyball team spiking his potent and astonishing spikes,and is the president for magic club learning very mysterious magic.On the other hand,Yueyue is a great actress in the drama club,acting a lot of different and interesting shows.

Lastly, Eric appears to be handsome when he is playing sports, with his “killing” spikes, and all the power and skills he has. But, rest of the time, he looks kind of cute. Unlike Eric, Yueyue is usually cute, but serious when she is playing and teaching us volleyball. I have known both of them when I participated in the CISSA volleyball team, and are now friends to both of them.
In conclusion, Eric and Yueyue are two of my best coaches. They both are awesome, clever, and I hope that on some day, my volleyball skills will be as good as theirs. And I will never forget the “killing” spiking.
sorry,没地方了,所以不要忘了,这儿还有一段.谢谢.