我英文语法差 谁帮我改改英语作文...

我英文语法差 谁帮我改改英语作文...
I always think that shopping on the internet is teenage thing.
obviously,is not.My mother and father are in love with online shop.
they even have a VIP card of the XX shop.I feel like shopping on the
internet is necessary in our lives.Shopping on the internet has
many advantages,We don't have to bring any bags or drive a car to
supermarket just for a few things.It saves a lots of time.And we can
fined everything on the internet,so we don't have to look all over
the shop just for something special.
on the other hand,it also has some disadvantages,We don't
know the quality of items.And we don't know how is it really look
like.We can hardly choice the day we get the item.We must take
all this risks and pay for it.We can only imagine how is it look like,
how big is it,and how's the weight of it.
In my opinion,shopping on the internet is not necessary
We can find everything you need in the supermarket,shop or
somewhere else.Sometimes you see something special on the
internet,you really want it.But actually,you may not gonna use
it,and you just buy it,because using the computer is easier than
you go to the shop and sometimes talk to the shop assistance
It's turn you into a lost control person.until you get the item you
may say:"Oh!dear,I must lost my mind."
谁帮我改改.语法什么的...