Accidents or electricity interruption occurs,SmartGrid provides emergency plan ,Button Start,in condision that emergency plan ensure the critical business normal to reduces overall energy consumption of data center and extend the UPS power supply time.比较着急用,大家看看这段话有语法错误吗

我觉得可不可以改成 When accidents such as electricity interruption occurs, SmartGrid provides emergency plan Button Start, in condition that the emergency plan can ensure the critical business normal for the purpose to reduces overall energy consumption of data center and extend the UPS power supply time.

SmartGrid provides emergency plan when accidents or electricity interruption occur. Button starts on condition that emergency plan ensures the critical business to be normal to reduce overall energy c...