在线修改推荐信,求英语达人看过来!Dear Sir or Madam,I am very pleased to recommend a promising student,Ruihan Ma,for admission into your graduate studies program in Electrical Engineering.I have known her since she enrolled in my course in “Digital Electronic Technique” in 2009.Because she was very conscientious do a good job in every aspect of this class; because she had extremely active performance in my class; because she was keen interested in discussing with me a

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在线修改推荐信,求英语达人看过来!
Dear Sir or Madam,
I am very pleased to recommend a promising student,Ruihan Ma,for admission into your graduate studies program in Electrical Engineering.
I have known her since she enrolled in my course in “Digital Electronic Technique” in 2009.Because she was very conscientious do a good job in every aspect of this class; because she had extremely active performance in my class; because she was keen interested in discussing with me about Digital Electronic knowledge I introduced after class.All those above impressed me deeply.Furthermore,she has a perceptive mind and good comprehension ability to understand the application of electronic technologies in industry.Once I taught about multivibrator circuit structure in my class,many students can not understand how to use the different form of circuit in different situation.Yet Ms.ma comprehended the key points of this problem rapidly and help other students solve this problem.
More importantly,as Ruihan is also a student cadre in her class,she showed her initiative to help those who weren’t able to attend the class or can’t grasp the key of this class.I had witnessed her well-organized content about the class we had,from which,she not only recorded many details I mentioned in the class,but also summarized them under a set of knowledge frames.I believe her efforts to do such summaries both helped to consolidate her knowledge acquisition and contributed to the whole class in their preparation of the course paper.I could perceive from her coursework conclusion paper that Ruihan was able to draw reference from the previous knowledge and synthesize them into independent thinking of her own to explore some new topics about the technology application in some industries.
To conclude,Ruihan gave me a deep impression as an active and industrial student who has special learning aptitude in academic study.She is also a passionate leader and organizer of student activities who possesses continuous zest to contribute to her community.Based on her notable performance,I believe Ruihan will achieve higher academic goal she set for herself through advanced professional training in your program,and thus I strongly recommend her for admission.Your favorable consideration will be appreciated.Should further information be required,I am most willing to provide assistance.
Truly,
首先想在开头说一下推荐人不仅给我教这门课,还是我的班主任.
其次,能否在内容上适当再充实一下.
求达人帮忙修改语法和用词!

帮你简单改了下,有些语法和时态上的小错误。student cadre是中国特色,老美是根本是看不懂的,student leader好得多。industial是工业的,industrious才是勤奋的。别太看重推荐信,老外都懂,中国的推荐信都是假的,除非你找到特别牛的人给你写(比如国际知名的教授)。
Dear Sir or Madam,
I am very pleased to recommend a promising student, Ruihan Ma, for admission to your graduate program in Electrical Engineering.
I have known her since she enrolled in my course in “Digital Electronic Technique” in 2009. She was very conscientious and did a good job in every aspect of this class. She had extremely active performance in my class and was keenly interested in discussing with me after class about the Digital Electronic knowledge I introduced in the classroom. All of those mentioned above deeply impressed me. Furthermore, she has a perceptive mind and a very good understanding about the application of electronic technologies in the industry. Once I taught about the multivibrator circuit structure in my class, many students could not understand how to use its different forms in various situations. Yet Ms. ma comprehended the key points of this problem rapidly and helped other students solve this problem.
More importantly, as Ruihan is also a student leader in her class, she showed her initiative to help those who weren’t able to attend the class or couldn’t grasp the key of this class. I had witnessed her well-organized content about the class we had. In the content, she not only recorded many details I mentioned in the class, but also summarized them under a set of knowledge frames. I believe her efforts to make such summaries both helped consolidate her own knowledge acquisition and contributed to the whole class in their preparation for the course paper. I could perceive from her coursework conclusion paper that Ruihan was able to draw reference from previous knowledge and synthesize them into independent thinking of her own to explore some new topics about the technology application in some industries.
To conclude, Ruihan gave me a deep impression as an active and industrious student who has special learning aptitude in academic study. She is also a passionate leader and organizer of student activities who exhibits continuous zest to contribute to her community. Based on her notable performance, I believe Ruihan will achieve higher academic goal she sets for herself through advanced professional training in your program, and thus I strongly recommend her for admission. Your favorable consideration will be appreciated. Should further information be required, I am most willing to provide assistance.
Truly,

Dear Sir or Madam,It is my pleasure to recommend a promising student,Ma Ruihan,for admission into your graduate study program in Electrical Engineering.I got acquainted with her when she enrolled in m...