请帮我把这句话改成正确的语法汉语：思想上一旦被束缚,你就会陷入困境,这已经成为一个等式.初稿：The equation is that you're enfettered in thought, you're enmeshed in doom.有人建议改成The equation is that you're enfettered in thought, being meshed in doom.我想知道按照语法这个句子应该怎么改?
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请帮我把这句话改成正确的语法
汉语：思想上一旦被束缚,你就会陷入困境,这已经成为一个等式.
初稿：The equation is that you're enfettered in thought, you're enmeshed in doom.
有人建议改成The equation is that you're enfettered in thought, being meshed in doom.
我想知道按照语法这个句子应该怎么改?
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The equation is that you're enfettered in thought, once being meshed in doom. 这句话感觉意思变了似的，不大懂……
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初稿两个分句有先后顺序含在里面，后面半句承接前面半句。而改后的用BEING形式则是表示伴随。根据中文及句子的形美要求，建议用初稿。
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像初稿的话要在后半句前面加AND .. 因为逗号隔开的话就是两个句子.
改了以后句子用非谓语动词做伴随状态.
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The equation is that you're enfettered in thought, once being meshed in doom.