帮我评价一下下面的短文.I was go to the fiml on yesterday.I'm waited for the bus.It takes me about 10 minutes.The bus was comed.I'm get on the bus.I saw a old woman get on the bus.I give a seat for her.the old woman said"Thank you""That's all right"I said.About 12 minutes,I'm get off the bus.I wave goodbye to the woman.I'm glad to give the old a seat.I was into the fiml.
帮我评价一下下面的短文.
I was go to the fiml on yesterday.I'm waited for the bus.It takes me about 10 minutes.The bus was comed.I'm get on the bus.I saw a old woman get on the bus.I give a seat for her.the old woman said"Thank you""That's all right"I said.About 12 minutes,I'm get off the bus.I wave goodbye to the woman.I'm glad to give the old a seat.I was into the fiml.
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首先客观评价的话..这篇短文几乎每一句都有问题..而且语法紊乱..时态混杂..还兼有一些单词错误..
但是从全文看来..条理明晰..也完全可以看出您此文要表达的意思..
帮您简单修改如下：
I was going to see a film yesterday.it took me about 10 minutes to wait for the bus.I got on the bus and saw an old woman get on the bus too.I gave up my seat for her.The old woman said"Thank you","You are welcome."I said.After about 12 minutes,I got off the bus and waved goodbye to the old woman.I was glad to help the old woman.then I went to the film.
您可以仔细对比一下..
祝您进步~
i went to the film yesterday.it took me 10 minutes to wait for the bus.after i got on the bus,i saw an old woman aboard the bus.i offerd my seat to her.she smiled and said "Thank you"to me.i answerd "...