看一下这个,哪里有错的都指出来,水平很低的啊!I like travel.Because it can make me happy and I can learn many things from every places in theworld.I went travel with my mum when I was six.From then on,I will go to a place that I haven’t been on each summer holiday.So I had been to many places in the world.Like America,Thailand,Malaysia,Singapore…That’s the overseas.In China,I had been to Guilin,Beijing,*,Macao,Sit sang,Guizhou… Oh,so many!I give a profundity impress

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看一下这个,哪里有错的都指出来,水平很低的啊!
I like travel.Because it can make me happy and I can learn many things from
every places in theworld.I went travel with my mum when I was six.From then on,
I will go to a place that I haven’t been on each summer holiday.So I had been to
many places in the world.Like America,Thailand,Malaysia,Singapore…That’s the
overseas.In China,I had been to Guilin,Beijing,*,Macao,Sit sang,
Guizhou… Oh,so many!I give a profundity impression of America and Sit sang.I
went to America with my classmate and teacher for 13 days.But with no parents.
That’s very interesting I think.So I must take care of myself.We had been to
San Francisco,Los Angel,New York and Washington D.C..But L.A.is the most
interesting.Because There is a Disney and Hollywood.And it’s much bigger than
the one in *!Also Sit sang make me surprise.That’s the mostbeautiful
place that I had seen.If I have a chance I will show the photo of Sit sang’s to you!
I enjoy travelling.That’s why the title of this article is “Travel in my life”!

I liked travelling because it could make me happy and I could learn lots of things from
many places in the world.I went to travel with my mum when I was six.From then on,
I would go to a place that I haven’t been on each summer holiday.Furthermore,I had been to
many places in the world like America,Thailand,Malaysia,and so on.In China,I had been to Beijing,*,Sit sang,ect.Oh,so many!I gave a profundity impression of America and Sit sang.I went to America with my class for 13 days.That was very interesting I thought.We had been to San Francisco,Los Angel,New York and Washington D.C..I thought L.A.was the most
interesting place because there has Disney and Hollywood and it’s much bigger than
the one in *!Also,Sit sang made me surprise:it was the most beautiful place that I had seen.If I had a chance,I would show the photos of Sit sang to you!
I enjoyed travelling.That’s why the title of this article is “Travel in my life”!
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