1、我想表达,越来越多来自小学的学生抱怨道,这些不断增加的作业让他们感觉如同活生生的机器.

1、我想表达,越来越多来自小学的学生抱怨道,这些不断增加的作业让他们感觉如同活生生的机器.
more and more students from primary school complain the increasing daily homework makes them feel like living machine.这样有没有问题,有没有更好的该法?
2、人们常常用废寝忘食这个成语描述一个人做某事时忘记吃饭和休息.
People living in China always use an idiom called ”Fei Qin Wang Shi” to describe someone who forgets eating and sleeping when he is doing affair.（能否用when doing something）有没有更好的改法
3、当你集中注意力在一件事上时,你会把其他事情认为次要,并且很难被他们影响.
Focusing on ur favorites,u will think other stuff peripheral and can hardly be disturbed by them.think sth peripheral 这个用法对吗,后面跟and hardly be .这样语法有没有问题?focusing前要不要更加when
4、我猜想,牛顿如果只知道完成作业而不去思考可能只是一个普通工人.
I guess that Newton might be a normal worker if he only know complete his homework each day without thinking.这句话有没有问题,是否要用虚拟语气,如果有问题,如何修改?
5、学生最好到社会中,通过类似打零工,志愿者等等的实践来提高沟通技能.
Students had better enter in the society to practice the communication skills by doing work such as part-time job,volunteer and so on.这句话有没有问题,有没有更好的写法?
6、最后一句,Of course,I never deny the function of the well designed homework,which help student impress the content of study,but towards daily homework,I will say “no”.尤其是towards daily homework,这样写有没有语病,I will say “no” 是否适合书面?
注：这是我写的作文,老师说很多细小的地方有问题,所以才来求助.请注意我每个题目的内容,题目中还有一些小问题,不要笼统的还没有看清题就回答了,要回答就认真点嘛,