看看这个英语短文有无语法错误?The Best means of transportation(题目)nowdays,with rapid developmentof our society,there is no doubt that the growing number of peoplehave the private car.but the pritatecar pose a great problem to our life.For example,environment pollution as well as traffic accidents.In fact,we have many choices.Andgo out by the private car is not thebest means of transportation.such as we can go out by bike,by bus,on foot.As far as i am concerned,for t

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The Best means of transportation(题目)
nowdays,with rapid developmentof our society,there is no doubt that the growing number of peoplehave the private car.but the pritatecar pose a great problem to our life.For example,environment pollution as well as traffic accidents.
In fact,we have many choices.Andgo out by the private car is not thebest means of transportation.such as we can go out by bike,by bus,on foot.
As far as i am concerned,for the begood for our healthy and protecting environment and saving energy,it is no exaggeration to say that the best choice ofgo out is ride bicycle.Because it isobvious that the choice have a great influence on the our healyh,protection environment and saving energy.
There is no denying that if we goout by bike,we can have a promising future.

括号中为修改处,修改意见见下面的评注

 

The Best Means of Transportation(题目)

 

  Nowdays, with rapid developmentof our society, there is no doubt that (a) growing number of people have (their) private car(s). But the private car(scause) a great problem to our life. For example, (we can often find) environment pollution as well as traffic accidents.

  In fact, we have many choices (beside going) out by the private, (for it) is not the (only) best means of transportation. (Therefore,) we can (also) go out by bike, by bus, on foot, (and so on).

  As far as I am concerned, (in order to) be good (to) our (health) and (to protect) environment and (save) energy, it is no exaggeration to say that the best choice of (going) out is (to) ride (a) bicycle, because it is obvious that the choice have a great influence on our health, (environment protection and energy saving).

  There is no denying that if we go out by bike, we can have a promising future.

 

【评注】

  • the number of people 指“人的总数”,此处指的是“许多人”,应该用 a number of people 是泛指,

  • 单数的“总数”不可能拥有私家车,拥有的是复数的a growing number of people,许多人的private car 应该是复数,改为private cars

  • pose 本意是“以特定的样子形成某种东西”,problem 不可能通过pose 形成,改为表示“带来某种结果”的 cause

  • environment pollution as well as traffic accident 只是个短语,不能独立成句,可以补充完整为 we can often find environment pollution as well as traffic accident,或者并入上文为cause a great problem to our life, for example, environment pollution as well as traffic accidents

  • 第二段毛病较多,整体修改为we have many choices beside going out by the private, for it is not the (only) best means of transportation(除了驾私家车出行外我们有多种选择,因为这不是唯一最好的交通手段).

  • such as 后面只能列举名词,不能跟句子

  • for the be good for our healthy and protecting environment and saving energy 处有较多的语法错误:动词 be 前不能用冠词 the,更不能直接用作介词宾语;be good for 意思是“对…适用”,“对…有好处”应该用be good to;动词原形be 与动名词protecting和using不能用and 并列;heslthy是形容词。此处整体改为,in order to be good to our health and to protect environment and save energy

  • 动词原形go out 不能直接跟在choice of 后面,改为choice of going out

  • 不能说the our health,冠词和物主代词不能同时修饰一个名词

  • 由动名词短语修改后的environment protection and energy saving 表示“环境保护和能源节省”,不然不能和our health 并列。

没有文法错误,不过注意单词的串写,有错误

The Best way of transportation with the rapid development of our society
the growing number of peoplehave the private car-more and more people have their private cars
privatecars environmental pollution as well as 改为,going out
such as 改为 as a result
for the begood for our healthy and protecting environment and saving energy改为:
for the good of our health,environmental protection and energy saving
ofgo out is ride bicycle改为of going out is riding bicycle