帮忙批改雅思作文Topic:research suggests that majority of criminals who were sent to * would commit crimes when set free.What do you think of this case?What to be done to solve this problem? In many parts of the world,crime problems are increasingly becoming the focus of the government and citizen concern.To me,I think that * system and society are probably responsible for this shows for the following reasons.The first reason we could not afford to i

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Topic:research suggests that majority of criminals who were sent to * would commit crimes when set free.What do you think of this case?What to be done to solve this problem? 
In many parts of the world,crime problems are increasingly becoming the focus of the government and citizen concern.To me,I think that * system and society are probably responsible for this shows for the following reasons.
The first reason we could not afford to ignore is that * can not solve the problem completely.The person who commit a crime,will be put into jail.During this period of time in *,expect doing some hard works,it is just remain boring.They do not reflect their wrong,but to continue doing works without any clear plan or purpose.This means that when they set free,they have not learnt any discipline or make any progress,so most of them take up their old job again.
Moreover,the social system also plays an important role on it.Even if normal people is difficult to establish themselves in this ever-increasingly crowded and complicated community.What about the people who have conviction record?Although they decide to restart their lives,the society is unwilling to admit them.
However,it is not very hard for people to improve this situation.I think the solution to the problem lies with the government,who need to be more aware of the future consequences of the criminal.If they could give the criminal an opportunity t prove themselves,and afford some lessons about the future plan for them,the whole community would benefit.
So overall,my view is that people is still have a lot of to deal with.The government should fund this kind of educational support,because this is no longer a problem for individual criminals,but for society as a whole.
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