能帮我改改下面的英文段落么 语法什么的 这是我的毕业演讲稿,希望有好心人帮帮忙!这是最后一段啦!

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能帮我改改下面的英文段落么 语法什么的 这是我的毕业演讲稿,希望有好心人帮帮忙!这是最后一段啦!
Aboutmy friends, wish we could have an everlasting friendship and finished our tinydreams. We used to have ice-cream parties. We played and giggled on our wayhome. We searched every corner of the street for snacks. I can’t make thepromise, however, I know the ordination of making a promise and I’m fearful offorecasting the consequence of breaking up the promise. No one can guaranteethat we can meet whenever we want. Even so, I am still eager to see you guys inone day, all of you guys!
Time doesn’t wait for anyone or anyreasons, but we can store up our memories and stay forever young!

about my friends ,I wish we would have an everlasting friendship and achieve our tiny dreams. We used to have ice-cream parties. We played and giggled on our way home. We searched every corner of the streets for snacks. I can’t make the promise, however, becauseI know the ordination of making a promise and I’m fearful of imagining the consequence of breaking up the promise. No one can guarantee that we can meet whenever we want. Even so, I am still eager to see you guys one day in the near future, all of you guys!
Time doesn’t wait for anyone or for any reasons, but we can cherish our memories and stay forever young!
纯手打,望采纳.哪些地方做出修改了呢?我好像没看到对比一下很清楚啊,比方说could 改成would 等等,你可以直接把我的复制下来就行了