托福口语求修改
托福口语求修改
我语法很烂,真的很烂……请不要口下留情.
Which campus improvement do you suggestyour school to invest in:
swimming pool,cafeteria ordormitory.Please give specific reasons to support
your opinion.
【Point】
1.Dormitary
2.No hot water
cannot take shower in our own dormitary and cannot drinktea ,caffe or hot water in winter
too bad
we are perhaps have cold.
3.beds are old enough
always make some crunching noises.
4.Some domitoris lived 5 students,somedomitoris lived 6 students,and each other lived 4 students.
Unfair
Too crowded
如果我理解的没错,你的观点是学校应该装修宿舍
你的观点还不错只要按合适的语序和句子说出来就可以了,下面是我简单写的一份方案（尽量保持了你的原文）：
From my perspective,school should invest campus improvement in dormitory mainly due to three reasons:
First of all,there is no hot water in our dorm.This makes us not able to take shower,and drink tea or hot water in winter,which is really bad.
Furthermore,the beds are really old.They make crunching noises when we sleep.
Last but not least,some students share a room with 3 students,and some share with 5,which is unfair,and obviously it's too crowded for the room with 6 people.
Therefore I believe dormitory should be improved.
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