帮忙看看我的英语作文

帮忙看看我的英语作文
研究生课程,要求是选一个题目写一段话,要有明确的主题,叙述和总结,我选的题目是Why I need to own a house
下面是我的文章,
++++ topic ++++
Why I need to own a house
++++ toipc sentence ++++
When I was young,my parents moved house too many times which resulted that I have never been living in a place for longer than 3 years and I instinctively have a strong impulse to own a house of my own.
++++ supporting sentence ++++
Every time I went to a brandnew place,I lost almost all my former friends and fuzzy but impressive memories.I needed to get to know some new people,at the time that I didn't know I would not see them years later,this seems so incomprehensible to a kid when thinking back.I realized that too flowing life just likes a quick meal that you will never know who the chef is.The best life should be settled and peaceful,in which I can immerse into the happiness to stay with my familiar things instead of the sense of distance when I'm facing all strange stuffs.I need to live with people I like instead of those who I have to be cautious to,I need to live in a space existing in a way I design instead of a room always likes the appearance I first saw it,I need to live as I like to some extent instead of constantly adjusting the surroundings.
++++ concluding sentence ++++
A house Doesn't make a home,but a home can't do without a house.