我的英语演讲稿子,谁帮我修改一下~

我的英语演讲稿子,谁帮我修改一下~
我的稿子在这：
Ladies and Gentlemen,boys and girls,good afternoon!My name is XXX,I come from Class Two ,Grade Seven.Today ,I’d like to share a story with you.
A terrible earthquake happened in Wenchuan on May 12,2008.Many people lost their lives and homes.During those days,a lot of stories about love could be heard.Here is one of them.After the earthquake,under a fallen building,some soldiers found that a woman died in a very strange way.When they were ready to take her away ,they were surprised to find that a baby in her arms was still alive .The baby was sleeping and wasn’t hurt at all.Between the dead mother and the living baby,there was a cell phone with a short message on the screen,“My dear baby ,if you can survive ,remember that I love you.” Everybody cried when they read these words.
Besides this story,many other stories also moved us deeply .From these stories,we know more about love.The greatest thing in the world is the mother-love.It is eternal and selfless.There is someone who will care you and love you forever,that is your mother.
You ’re lucky if you’re loved by others.You’re great if you love others when you’re in danger.
That’s all,thank you!
这演讲稿子大概用2分钟整讲完,谁可以帮我补充一点,让我大概2分半钟演讲完?谢谢了````