短文改错,最好能叙述原因

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短文改错,最好能叙述原因
One night,while surfig the Internet,I happen to find a chat room.There people were talking to each other happily in English .I couldn’t help chat with some of them .Much too my surprise ,I found the oral English of some teenagers was much better than me .I realized my oral English needed improve.I asked them for advices and they encouraged me to practice more whenever possibly.So every day I would spend about an hour practing my oral English.Day by day I made a great progess in my oral English,With time going by,my efforts paid off and I could even communicate foreigners freely

One night,while SURFING the Internet,I HAPPENED to find a chat room.There people were talking to each other happily in English .I couldn’t help CHATTING with some of them .TO my GREAT surprise ,I found the oral English of some teenagers THERE was much better than MINE .I realized my oral English needed IMPROVEMENT.I asked them for advices and they encouraged me to practice more whenever POSSIBLE.So NOW every day I spend about an hour PRACTICING my oral English.Day by day I HAVE made great PROGRESS in my oral English.AS time GOES by,my efforts HAVE paid off and I NOW could even communicate WITH foreigners freely.
总的来说还不错,如果你只是一个teenager的话,这个水平起点很高了.
直接给你改在文章里了,有改动的地方都用大写标出,包括拼写错误.不过有的地方是改了结构而且删除了个别词语,请自己对照修改.