请帮我看看语法和用法错误谢谢Passage 3 A Love of OceanThe murmuring of ocean tells me that I am a beach man.I can still remember the first time I had a superb view of the ocean when I was only 4 years old.It was a raining day,I was scared stiff by the roar of waves,but very next day ocean surprised me by her sunshine coast; “that is amazing,” I thought then.When I was living in Japan,I had travelled almost every famous beach,such as the Matsushima beach,and Aoyama b
请帮我看看语法和用法错误谢谢
Passage 3 A Love of Ocean
The murmuring of ocean tells me that I am a beach man.I can still remember the first time I had a superb view of the ocean when I was only 4 years old.It was a raining day,I was scared stiff by the roar of waves,but very next day ocean surprised me by her sunshine coast; “that is amazing,” I thought then.When I was living in Japan,I had travelled almost every famous beach,such as the Matsushima beach,and Aoyama beach.After I moved to Miyazaki,I specially chose an apartment which is located near the Oni beach; therefore,I could ride my bicycle to have a delight afternoon on it whenever I want.The beach gave me the feeling of extremely familiarity and closeness when I was new in a foreign country.Two years ago,I moved to the United States,every time I felt lost I drove to Newport beach for those familiar sound from ocean,then try to face up all the difficulties in front of me.I believe that beach is the best company who can listen your complaining quietly,and can tell you that everything will be fine through her murmuring.
最好在第三行very 前加上the,不过我觉得还是去掉very 比较好,因为在这里好像不是很通顺,末尾listen 后面加to,因为listen是不及物动词,其他的都很好,我觉得你的文采很棒,呵呵。加油
It was a rainy day
the very next day
I could ride my bicycle to have a delightful afternoon on it whenever I want.(delight为名词或动词)
extreme familiarity
tried to face up all the difficulties in front of me.
who can listen to your complaining quietly
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