我英语作文这个句子在语法上对吗ask the peson in the street what the film that can give people feelings about the life of the past is,you may get the answer Those Years

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我英语作文这个句子在语法上对吗
ask the peson in the street what the film that can give people feelings about the life of the past is,you may get the answer Those Years

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没有问题,写的不错!

答:有!
改:逗号为and或逗号后加and
析:句子结构:祈使句,and陈述句(多为将来时态的句子).
Ask sb.that question,and you may get the answer " XX".
that question= what that film is
that film=the film that can give people feeling about the life.
这是句子结构上的问题,因为宾语从句太长(其中套了定语从句),你就顾不过来了.
还有一种改法是在前面加上:If you...
第一个the改成a较好,因为大街上人很多,大街上那个人?是哪个人呢?应该是随便问一个大街上的【一】个人吧?
句意是:如果你在街道问一个人,那个能给人关于生活(生命)的感觉(感情)的电影是什么,你也许得到《那些年》这个答案.
从修辞法上讲,这个句子太长,不平衡.宾语从句可再简短些.
试:If you ask a person in the street what film gives you the feelings of life,the answer may be Those Years.

采用了简单的衔接手法,行文流畅;文中句子错误偏多了;文中有较多拼写错误,请作者增加词汇量的积累;请注意分段;连词使用偏少。