我英语作文这个句子在语法上对吗ask the peson in the street what the film that can give people feelings about the life of the past is,you may get the answer Those Years
我英语作文这个句子在语法上对吗
ask the peson in the street what the film that can give people feelings about the life of the past is,you may get the answer Those Years
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没有问题,写的不错!
答:有!
改:逗号为and或逗号后加and
析:句子结构:祈使句,and陈述句(多为将来时态的句子).
Ask sb.that question,and you may get the answer " XX".
that question= what that film is
that film=the film that can give people feeling about the life.
这是句子结构上的问题,因为宾语从句太长(其中套了定语从句),你就顾不过来了.
还有一种改法是在前面加上:If you...
第一个the改成a较好,因为大街上人很多,大街上那个人?是哪个人呢?应该是随便问一个大街上的【一】个人吧?
句意是:如果你在街道问一个人,那个能给人关于生活(生命)的感觉(感情)的电影是什么,你也许得到《那些年》这个答案.
从修辞法上讲,这个句子太长,不平衡.宾语从句可再简短些.
试:If you ask a person in the street what film gives you the feelings of life,the answer may be Those Years.
采用了简单的衔接手法,行文流畅;文中句子错误偏多了;文中有较多拼写错误,请作者增加词汇量的积累;请注意分段;连词使用偏少。