评价英语短文
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I am an ordinary person.Of course,I have one nose and two eyes.It is easy for you to discover it!
I am an ordinary student.From Monday to Friday,I have to go to school as other student.On weekends,I have to go to study something too.
I think I am good at studying,but I’m not good at exam.I seldom get good scores,I often make some small mistakes.Although I seldom good scores,I never give up.I think once I try my best,I will get it repaid.In many ways,I am not the best one,but I never give up.I always try it again and again,when I get in trouble.Finally,I often succeeded.
Never give up,this is me.
Never give up,I am who I am!
现在怎么样?………………
I am an ordinary person.Of course,I have one nose and two eyes.It is easy for you to discover it!
I am an ordinary student.From Monday to Friday,I have to go to school as other student.
I am good at studying,but I’m not good at exam.I seldom get good scores,I often make some small mistakes.Although I seldom good scores,I never give up.I think once I try my best,I will get it repaid.I didn’t know how to ride bike until 12 years old.In a summer vacation,my mum asked me to learn ride a bike.At the beginning,I can't keep balanced at all.I fell on the ground again and again.My leg hurt,my arm hurt.But I didn’t give up.Finally,I learned how to ride a bike.Now,I always go to school by bike.
In many ways,I am not the best one,but I never give up.When I get in trouble,I always try it again and again.
Never give up,this is me.
公主,你敢不抄别人的吗?
内容评论:空洞,口号太多.废话不少.逻辑错误很多.即使语言没有任何错误,也只能拿及格分(在中国),在国外,不及格.am an ordinary person.Of course,I have one nose and two eyes.It is easy for you to discover it...