Hello,everyone.The bus is leaving in a few minute So I'd just like go over some of our safe rules bHello,everyone.The bus is leaving in a few minute So I'd just like go over some of our safe rules before we set off.Firstly,you mustn't get out of the bus with my permission改错Hello,everyone.The bus is leaving in a few minute So I'd just like go over some of our safe rules before we set off.Firstly,you mustn't get out of the bus with my permission Remembe

with 改成without 没有我的允许，不许下车

,you mustn't get out of the bus with my permission
or, ,you mustn't get out of the bus without my permission
有一点没有礼貌吧?很rude
不如:,you shouldn't get out of the bus unless with my permission.你不应该离开大巴,除非有我的许可.

有两处错误,具体分析如下：
1.正确 Hello,everyone.—— 呼语
2.正确 The bus is leaving in a few minute.
—— in a few minute 表示将来的“几分钟后”,趋向动词的进行时态 is leaving 表示不久的将来,
3.部分有错误 So I'd just like go over some of our safe rules before we set off.
1）正确的讲法应该是 'd like to do,因此此处要改为 I'd just like to go over some of our safe rules；
2）后面的时间状语从句中用一般现在时态表示将来没有错误.
4.有错误 Firstly,you mustn't get out of the bus with my permission
—— you mustn't get out of the bus 意思是“你们绝对不能下车”,而 with my permission 却表示“在我的许可下”,前后矛盾,应该改为 without my permission（没有我的许可）.
5.补充部分也有两处错误：
1）If you get out of on your town 应该改为 If you get out of the bus on your town 或者 If you get out on your town.理由是 of 是介词,后面必须有宾语,因此必须补充宾语 the bus 或者干脆删除 of .
2）you all must stay closely to me.中的 stay 是表示状态的系动词,其后应该用形容词 close 作表语,需要改为 you all must stay close to me （把副词 closely 改为形容词 close）

Hello, everyone. The bus is leaving in a few minutes. So I'd just like to go over some of our safe rules before we set off. Firstly, you mustn't get out of the bus without my permisssion. Remember that you're safe inside the bus. Of you get out of your town, you might be attackted.Secondly, you all must stay close to me.
顺便问一下，这段话是提问者遇到的改错题，还是要用这些话来实际应用啊？改错就不说了，实际应用的话需要仔细推敲一下了，文章中有很多不地道的表达方式。(*^__^*)