帮我改一下这篇托福口语第一题的语法错误well,Zhenghua shopping center is my pavorite place.first,my home is near this shopping center.i walk there just need 10 minutes.but if i go anther place to shop,i have to drive my car cause this place is far away from my home,with the bad trafficondition,it will takes me 1 hour to there.it's terrible!so shopping in the Zhuanghua will save me much time.what's more,Zhuanghua shopping center is always discount.if i buy a t shirt in ant
帮我改一下这篇托福口语第一题的语法错误
well,Zhenghua shopping center is my pavorite place.
first,my home is near this shopping center.i walk there just need 10 minutes.but if i go anther place to shop,i have to drive my car cause this place is far away from my home,with the bad trafficondition,it will takes me 1 hour to there.it's terrible!so shopping in the Zhuanghua will save me much time.
what's more,Zhuanghua shopping center is always discount.if i buy a t shirt in anther place,it may charge 100 dollars,but in Zhenghua,just 50 dollars i can take it home.you konw i am a student,i have no independent source of income,my bill gonna kill me if i shopping in anther place,but in zhanghua,i won't run out of my budget.
that's why i like this place to shop for clothes.
亲，都是最基础的错误啊！如果这你都改不了还怎么考托福？！！！
well, Zhenghua shopping center is my pavorite place.
first, my home is near this shopping center. It just takes me 10 minutes to walk there. But if i go to another place to do some shopping, i'll have to drive my car cause this place is far away from my home. Due to the bad traffic condition, it will cost me 1 hour to get there.It's terrible! so shopping in Zhuanghua will save me much more time.
what's more, Zhuanghua shopping center always offers discounts. For example, if i buy a T-shirt in another place, it may charge me 100 dollars, but in Zhenghua, just 50 dollars will close the deal. You know i am a student,i have no independent sources of income, my bill is gonna kill me if i do shopping in another place, but in zhanghua, i won't run behind my expenses.
That's why i like this place so much.
请楼主仔细看下我作出修改的部分，有的地方我进行了较大的改动，感觉会更符合英文逻辑。
额……我口语23说点意见啊,虽然不高,但是我觉着托福口语只要有逻辑,发音清晰,就能拿到22左右的分数,对于中国人也凑合了吧所以啊,你这个逻辑也有问题,虽然我觉着模版不是好东西,但是一点规矩都没有也不好啊第一个没问...