09年12月六级作文,我这样写的话大概可以得多少分啊?

09年12月六级作文,我这样写的话大概可以得多少分啊?
Have you sent your kids to art classes?According to the recent survey,84.6% of population trends to send their kids to a variety of art classes rather than just stay in classes to absorb knowledge.So from which we can discover that the amount of sending their kids to art classes gained increasing popularity among parents and children.
On one hand,the majority of people hold the view that it is imperative.To begin with,a number of art classes will propel ……..(记不到了)as a result,they can easily grope a way out in job competition.what’s more,（也记不到了..大概就是说不仅可以修养外在,也可以形成永久的艺术气质）on the other hand,some people disagree that and think it is negligible.The reason is that the kids will make an attempt at doing art exercises and ignore what they indeed to do.
Obviously,from what I have commented above and take all these in account,my conclusion is that it is necessary to send the children to the art classes.However,one point should be kept in mind is that classes should be still the leading means for kids to absorb knowledge and we should leave more room to our kids to do what they are really interest in.
能不能得到80分啊？