请人帮我改一篇六级作文~

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请人帮我改一篇六级作文~
泪牛满面。说字数超限制不能全发上来,哪位比较有经验的留个邮箱,我把作文发给他改行么?
So,whether the university ranking helps or misleads students to choose university Before giving my opinion,I think it is important to look at the argument on public.People’s views vary from one to another.People support university ranking for the following three reasons.First and foremost,the students and parents with less experience in choosing universities will benefit from university ranking.Secondly,it is necessary to build a competitive atmosphere among universities by ranking them.Last but not the least,university ranking is a good reference for employer to recruit staffs.
The other person who oppose to university ranking express their worry that it have a negative influence on students,which makes them choose university only concerning the ranking but not their true interest

整体说 还可以 个别小错误
第六行 employers
第七行 people
第八行 concerned about
祝你好一个好成绩谢谢啦~这只是作文的其中一段呀。还有三段。能不能给个邮箱我把全文发给你帮我再看看?另外第八行那确实丢了个about,但是为什么用concerned不用concerning呢?