请帮我批改一下英语作文：我的幸福生活
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请帮我批改一下英语作文：我的幸福生活
MyHappiness in Life
Whatis happiness?Happiness is when you get sick when someone gives you a cup ofwater and drugs.
Onetime,I was sick in bed.He came home from work and saw me like this,andasked:"Are you sick?" I said:"cold have a fever." Helistened to me,he poured a glass of water,took a drugs,let me medication,atthat time,I am very happy!
Inretrospect,happiness is so simple when you are sick when someone gives you acup of water and drugs,this is my happiness in life.
答
你这作文更像是我的朋友,不是我的幸福生活.
标点用的不好;
叙事太过平淡
没有大的语法错误,时态用的不错.