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I am a boy from Henan Procince.This winter holiday I came to Hangzhou to play.When I see the city ,I was surprised by the beatiful view of Hangzhou.The city is very clean ,the people are very friendly.Especially the West Lake,it is my paradise in the world!The green water and the sweet flowers make me feel relax.I love Hangzhou so much.If I have one more chance,I will come here again.
On December,2002,China won the bid to hosting Expo 2010.This is the first General Exhibition hosted by a developing country; However,China has a long-standing relationship with World Expo.Chinese people have participated in World Expo since its first presence.After wining its liberation,the People’s * has taken part in 12 world expositions.Chinese exhibits won many prizes in previous world expositions.The Yisheng Wine was awarded with the gold medal at Expo 1906 Milan Italy; many others like the embroidery of the Portrait of Jesus,Gold Prize Brandy ,and Mao-Tai Chiew were among the highlights at the Panama-Pacific International Exposition—San Francisco 1915.