英语高手帮我看一下这句话有没有语法错误,As individuals pay closer attention to travel abroad,an argument about the safety is appearing increasingly.学艺不精,麻烦高手帮我看下这句话语法有没有错误,写作的时候这里面有没有哪些词可以用更好的话来替换,除了travel abroad 和safety

英语高手帮我看一下这句话有没有语法错误,
As individuals pay closer attention to travel abroad,an argument about the safety is appearing increasingly.
学艺不精,麻烦高手帮我看下这句话语法有没有错误,写作的时候这里面有没有哪些词可以用更好的话来替换,除了travel abroad 和safety