这篇文章在雅思小作文里能拿多少分?
这篇文章在雅思小作文里能拿多少分?
Pie chart
the pie chart compares popularity of the various leisure activities of European adults in 1985 and 1995 .
a glance at the proportion of leisure activities of European adults in 1985,It clearly reveals the most popular leisure activity is watching TV.Which account for 32 percent of total pie chart.the second popular activity is talking with friend,which account for 21 of the proportion.The following popular activities are eating out ,talking with family and other,which are 23 percent and 18 percent and 6 percent respectively.
By stark contrast,The proportion of leisure activities of European aults in 1995 is quite different from 1985.Watching TV is still the most popular activity in 1995,but It declined to 30% from 32%.Interestingly,Playing computer was suddenly occur bettween 1985 and 1995 also directly replace talking with friends that was second popular,Also playing computer account for 27 percent of the proportion.the talking with friends was increased to 26% in 1995.however,eating out and talking with family was declined rapidly from 23% to 8% and from 18% to 7% respectively.
我没有看到图表,但是从文章上看应该是涵盖了图表里面的主要内容,并且有前后的对比内容.但是有几个问题:这篇文章没有总结,雅思小作文是需要有一句总结的话的.时态.这篇文章内容全部都是过去的事情,所以时态应该是以...