四级作文,请高手修改.
四级作文,请高手修改.
1.校学生会将组织一次暑假志愿者活动,现招募志愿者
2.本次志愿者活动的目的、内容、安排等
3.报名条件及联系方式
With the summer holiday coming ,the organize of students in our school will organize a activity.The organize of students is inviting volunteers to take part in it in recently.
If you would join it,you would be taken to the poor distict where is far from away here.You would be required help the student who is in troble about study.You should teach them how to learn lesson by himself and to understand the fun of get knowledge .We planed arriving there on july 18th,and come back on august 15th.So you will spend a half of you summer holiday on it .Come on!If you join it ,you will enjoy yourself during the summer holiday.The experience will bring you diferent tastes of life.
If you are our school student and you have a heathy body .Welcome to together with your and your classmates to attend the activity which have full of meaning.Finally,Please leave your cellphone number and your address.We will call you.
With the summer holiday coming , the Students' Unionin our school will organize an
activity. the Students' Union is inviting volunteers to take part in it in recently.
If you would join it,you would be taken to the poor district where is far away from here.You would be required to help the students who are in trouble with their study.You should teach them how to learn lesson by himself and to understand the fun of getting knowledge .We planed arriving there on July18th,and come back on august 15th.So you will spend a half of your summer holiday on it .Come on! If you join it ,you will enjoy yourself during the summer holiday.What ‘s more,The experience will bring you diferent tastes of life.
If you are our school student and you have a healthy body .Welcome to attend the activity which is full of meaning together with your classmates. Finally,pease leave your cellphone number and your address.We will call you.
① “学生会”应译成the Students' Union
②an activity
③“distict”这个单词有误,应该是“district”(区域,地域）,对吗?
④“far from away ”应改成“far away from”
（解析：far away 用作表语或状语,away可以省去,因此,far away = far ; far away from = far from
far （away） 后不接宾语；far （away） from 后一定要接宾语.
The do not live far away.
他们住得并不远．
far from除了表示距离的”远离”之外,还有”远远不,完全不,决非”之意,后接名词,动名词或形容词．
Far from reading his letter,she didn't openit.
别说看他的信了,她连信都没打开．
He is far from (being)rich.
他一点也不富有．
至于away from 与far from的区别主要在于far与away的区别：
far是表示较笼统、模糊概念的“远”,而away是表示具体的“远”.如：very far很远；quite far相当远； 500 meters away 500米远； 2 kilometers away 2公里远
e.g. My home is very far from the hospital.
My home is 20 kilometers away from the hospital）
⑤required help 应改成required to help
⑥前后句子的相关内容最好主谓一致
⑦in trouble with……
⑧介词后面的动词要用ing
⑨应为July ,月份开头要大写
⑧you应改成your
⑨在第二段的最后一句前加上一个关联词——What ‘s more,句子就更有水平了.
⑩healthy才是“健康的”的正确拼写哦
⑾be full of 是固定用法
⑿“你的同学们一起”应译成together with your classmates,并把这个介词短语放在句末当状语比较妥当哦