帮我修改一篇英语文章(高中的)

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帮我修改一篇英语文章(高中的)
我该上高三了.写的不是很好,希望能帮我修改下,
My hobby
Everyone has different hobbies,such as collecting stamps or coins.My hobby is collecting notebooks.Maybe it sounds strange,but if other people can collect stamps or coins,why can't I collect notebooks?
I have had this special hobby since when I was a primary school student.Once Iwent shopping and noticed a lovely notebook.Loving it at first sight,I boughtit without too much thinking.since then,I often find the notebooks that are beautiful or special when I am shopping .Now I have been collecting more than 100 different notebooks.I treat them as my own treasure.
It is interesting for me to collect every notebook that attracts me.It is easy to do.neither needing any tools or equipment nor too much money.The only thing you shuold do is just choose what you really love from a variety of notebooks.Though I won't learn the world of knowledge from the simple hobby,I still can enjoy myself.A hobby is a great way to relax,isn't it?Beside when doing collectino,I understand that beautiful things always around our lives.
At last,I want to tell you what you collect are not important,the matter is your heart.

1.but if other people can collect stamps 1.or coins,why can't I collect notebooks?修改:while也有转折的意思,此句改成下面的更地道:why can't I collect notebooks while others can collect stamps or coins...