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making a good impression
Make a good impression
Nowadays,making a good impressing at the employment is an important and essential step in society.Despite the fact that you are a man of extraordinary talents,it is possible that you cannot acquire a desired job.Just because you don’t know how to interview,you may lose a lot of opportunities.It takes quick glance just about two or three seconds for someone to understand you when you meet for the first time.Your behaviors and appearance may tell others what type of the person you are.Accordingly,whether you can make a good impression is significant for us to form an advantageous recognition in others’ mind.
First of all,the most important thing,I think,is a beautiful and confident smile.A smile has capability of shortening the distance between you and stranger like the employer.People will consider you are a friendly and warm-hearted man and are glad to talk with you.
Secondly,right body language is also necessary for us.Some people have several bad habits,which is possible to be seen by others.It may cause a misunderstanding that you are anxiety and look down on the others.A gently and polite action can present you appropriately when you are introducing yourself and talking about your point of views.
Of course,a number of ways can make a good impression to you,such as neat and tidy dressing,polite speaking.However,in a word,the sincere and true attitude can help you get the belief of stranger.The more confident you are,the more chance for you to attain.
What kind of person re you?It seems you want a very formal composition,but the topic does not look so academic or sophisticated.
Make a good impression
Making a good impression on your potential/prospective employer is very essential.Despite the fact that you are a man of extraordinary talents,it is possible that you cannot acquire a desired job,just because you don’t know how to behave proper at an interview.A quick glance,just about two or three seconds,is enough for someone to form an opinion of you when he sees you for the first time.Your behaviors and appearance may tell others what type of the person you are.Accordingly,your ability to leave a good first-impression may help greatly to bring an advantageous recognition in others’ mind.
In order to achieve this,the most important thing（最重要?那下面总结呢?真诚的态度?）,I think,is a beautiful and confident smile.A smile has capability of shortening the distance between you and such stranger as the employer.People will consider you a friendly and warm-hearted man and are glad to talk with you.
Secondly,the correct body language is also necessary (for YOU).While some bad habits (什么?太抽象) may cause misunderstanding,making you appear anxious and arrogant,a gentle and polite action can present you appropriately when you are introducing yourself and talking about your point of views.
Of course,a number of ways can help you leave a good impression (ON OTHERS),such as neat and tidy dressing,polite speaking.However(为什么转折),what is truly important is the sincere and true attitude,which can help you win the trust of a stranger.The more confident(逻辑乱,confident----polite,gentle ---sincere ---confident到底什么重要) you are,the more chance you can get.