I want to be a writerI want to be a writer when i grow up,because i like reading books.Books can make me feel happy or excited.And i wang to write some books for readers.So that,i will feel successful and readers can feel happy,too.If one day i die,These books will be my wealth.I should do some things when i am alive.So i want to be a writer to minute my lives.But it is difficult to be a writer.However,i won't give up.I will write some article from no

books can make me feel happy or excited ,or最好改成and
and I wang to write some books for readers，wang 改成want（这个应该是笔误）后面一句，表达得不太好，我的意见是改成then my readers will feel happy,and I can feel successful,too.
I should do some things when I am alive改一下 I must do something(注意是something）when I am alive.
I want to be a writer to minute my life(不是lives) article是可数的 要加s
I will fight（奋斗） for my dream.

还是有一些小的语法错误、 But it is difficult to be a writer.However,i won't give up、关联词用错了、but和however是不能连用的、应该将but改为even、（尽管）.Books can make me feel happy or excited.这句中的or用的不恰当、or本意为：或者、大多数用在否定句和疑问句中、而且翻译起来也不恰当、So that,i will feel successful and readers can feel happy,too. so that不能独立使用、只能接句子、或if引导的条件状语从句、 will feel successful and readers can feel happy,too. readers前应加一个定冠词起限制作用、不然这么多读者到底哪些是读你的文章感到高兴的呢？ I should do some things when i am alive.该句的开头应用so、表承接作用、
article是可数名词、复数为articles、
I willt work hard to make my dream come true （我会为实现我的理想而努力奋斗的）
呵呵、还是有一些容易出现的语法错误、不过我现在看我初一的英语作文也发现了这些小毛病、
祝你英语越学越好、成绩步步提升、
一名即将升入高一的14岁女学生

1、 I want to be a writer when i grow up,because i like reading books.
此处grow up和because之间不能有逗号。
正确应该是：I want to be a writer when i grow up because i like reading books.
2、Books can make me feel happy or excited.
此处的or最好改成and。
3、 I want to be a writer when i grow up because i like reading books.Books can make me feel happy or excited.And i wang to write some books for readers.So that,i will feel successful and readers can feel happy,too.
这段我觉得理由和原因之间有些混乱，我建议改成：
I want to be a writer when i grow up.First,I like reading books.Books can enrich my knowledge and broaden my mind.Second, I love writing books to readers.If I write good books to readers,I will be prond of myself.Readers will feel happy,too.
4、If one day i die,These books will be my wealth.I should do some things when i am alive.So i want to be a writer to minute my lives.
这段意思表述得不错，但我觉得逻辑还是有些混乱，建议改成：
Everyone will die.I should do some things when i am alive.Writing good books is meaningful.If one day i die,These books which I written will be my wealth.I want to be a writer to minute my lives.
5、But it is difficult to be a writer.However,i won't give up.
建议改成：
Although it is difficult to be a writer,I still won`t give it up.
6、我会为我的理想奋斗的：I will strive to my dream.
7、文章的内容还是不错的，但我觉得第二、第三段落的顺序可以调整一下，由浅至深嘛。

表达方式不敢恭维！

I want to be a writer as i am growing up,because i like reading books.Books can make me feel pretty happy .i want to write some books for readers by this way as well.So that i will feel successful while readers can feel happy at the same time too.
If one day i die,these books will be my wealth.I should do some things when i am alive.So i want to be a writer in order to make my life meaningful.
It can be very certain that it is difficult to be a writer,but i won't give up.I will write some articles from now on.I think i should start out small,which is helpful for my fulfillment of my dream.
因为没有办法划出修改部分,见谅.
另外,只是把一些错误修正,至于润色,可以再自己动下手
翻译：i'll strive for my dream

article应该可数
翻译：I will strive for my dream.

I want to be a writer
I want to be a writer when i grow up,because i like reading books.Books can make me feel happy or excited.And i wang to write some books for readers.So that,i will feel successful and readers can feel happy,too.
修改意见： I like reading books, so i want to be a writer when I grow up. Books can make me feel happy and exciting. I also want to write some books and have my own readers. Good books can make readers happy too.
If one day i die,These books will be my wealth.I should do some things when i am alive.So i want to be a writer to minute my lives.
修改意见: I want to record my life through writing books when I am alive. Even when I died some day, those books written by me would be some kind of wealth left.

But it is difficult to be a writer.However,i won't give up.I will write some article from now on.I think i should start out small.Then i can find it is valuable for me.
修改意见： To be a writer is not an easy thing. Of course, I will not give up. From now on, I will insist on writing some small articles everyday. Though small articles are simple, I think they are useful to train me to be a real writer in the future.