求修改初三英语作文大概会有很多语法错误……Unforgettable Experience,Some memory will not disappear when the time past.I'm 15 years old now,but an experience in my childhood is still clear and unforgettable.One day,all my family went to climb a mountain.There father told me if I was the first one to reach the top,I would be given a toy.The mountain was high and difficult to climb,but I didn't give up.In the end I got to the top first.I learned that I shouldn't give up when

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求修改初三英语作文
大概会有很多语法错误……
Unforgettable Experience,
Some memory will not disappear when the time past.I'm 15 years old now,but an experience in my childhood is still clear and unforgettable.One day,all my family went to climb a mountain.There father told me if I was the first one to reach the top,I would be given a toy.The mountain was high and difficult to climb,but I didn't give up.In the end I got to the top first.I learned that I shouldn't give up when I meet with difficulties from this experience,it was really unforgettable.
恩,把语法错误挑出来然后修改一下就可以了……实在羞于见人所以我匿名了……

1 “when the time past”最好改成“as the time goes by”
2 “climb mountains ”固定搭配
3 “meet with difficulties”的“with”删掉

the time past---the去掉
meet with ---with可以不加

Some memory will not disappear as the time goes on.I'm 15 years old now,but an experience in my childhood is still clear and unforgettable.One day,all my family went to climb a mountain.There my fathe...