这句话对吗?will you come in my rooms this evening?我要表达的意思是今天晚上你来我家好吗?

Will you come in my rooms this evening?意思是：今晚你要进来我房间吗?
Would you like to come to my home tonight?今天晚上你来我家好吗?

Will you come to my house tonight?

do you like to come to my house this evening?

would you like to my home this evening？

Will you come to my home this evening?

would you come to my house this evening

room是指房子里的单个房间.要表达"家"的意思应该用home或者house.
楼上的说法都对,但would like的说法最佳.

不妨口语化一点 Come to my home tonight, okay?

Would you come to my house this evening?

一般room是房子里的单间, 家应该用home或者house:
Would you like to come to my house this evening/tonight? 还要注意介词的用法.不能用in.

晚上来我房间吧？
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Will you come to my place this evening?
今晚可以来我家吗

come in 是进来，就像come on ,baby，用在句子里要注意
一般room是房子里的单间, 家应该用home或者house:
Would you like to come to my house this evening/tonight? 还要注意介词的用法.不能用in.

Would you like to come to my house tonight?

Tonight you come my family to be good?
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