请问以下这句话语法对不对,是不是符合习惯用法
问题描述：
请问以下这句话语法对不对,是不是符合习惯用法
Promotion of China’s transport electronization,Informatization and intelligence is our responsibility.
答
主语比较长,用形式主语会好些; 而且不要太多名词化定语
It is our responsibility to promote the electronization,informatization and intelligence of China's transport