People who hold different view maybe will say,if students do take up part-time job.People who hold different view maybe will say,if students do take up part-time job that they may not have enough time to study.持不同见解的人可能会说：如果学生做兼职,他们可能没有足够的时间来学习或休息.英文文法意思上是否有误?
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People who hold different view maybe will say,if students do take up part-time job.
People who hold different view maybe will say,if students do take up part-time job that they may not have enough time to study.
持不同见解的人可能会说：如果学生做兼职,他们可能没有足够的时间来学习或休息.
英文文法意思上是否有误?
答
是的,这句英语读起来比较费劲.建议改一下：
People with different opinions may argue that students who do part-time jobs may not have enough time for study.