能不能帮我看看我的英文自我介绍哪里需要修改的?

能不能帮我看看我的英文自我介绍哪里需要修改的?
如题,哪里还需要修改和完善的,比如语法问题,各段落和各句的连接问题,用词和措辞问题等等.
Good day everybody!It is really a great honor to have this opportunity to introduce myself here.I hope I can make a good impression on you.
My name is Zhang Bingjie.I was born in Xingjiang,a remote place where I spent my happy childhood.In 2000,I graduated from ABC University,majored in Chinese language and literature.Shortly after my graduation,I left my hometown and came to Shanghai.Thereafter,I started to live on my own and learned to face the social pressure alone.
10 years,only a drop in the ocean of human history,make me from an innocent girl to a mature and independent woman.In these years,I’ve worked in several companies with different bosses and different colleagues,started as an office clerk and became a top manager finally.The industries that I’ve engaged in ranging from advertizing,manufacture to logistics.The last two companies that I’ve worked for belongs to logistics industry.From 2005 to 2008,I served as General Manager’s assistant and later manager of management department in Shanghai ABC Company which is one of the most prestigious customs clearance agencies in Shanghai.During the time,I learned a great deal of knowledge in customs affairs.Based on these knowledge,A performance appraisal system for all level employees among the company had been designed and implemented.It turns out that the system is effective for improving work efficiency and quality.From 2008 to 2010,I worked as a project manager of logistics department in YN Ltd.There,my key tasks is to Supervise and control the whole process of logistics project,ranging from booking,picking up goods,ocean shipping/sea transportation,customs clearance,transportation by land or rail to final delivery.As a result,I got much practical experience of logistics operation.Moreover,during 2005 and 2008,I completed all the self-study courses on English language and literature in Shanghai International Studies University and got the second bachelor’s degree.
In 2010,I got a baby girl and then quit the job.Now,I am a happy mother and a satisfied wife.But I also need to have my own career.So,I’m here now.
Before I close,something I must say is,sometimes youth has nothing to do with age,because youth is a kind of mind-set and spirit.Often,ability has nothing to do with diploma,because ability increases in practice.I’m the one with positive attitude and rich experience.Please give my application materials a serious consideration and then give me a chance,I’m sure I will give you a surprise in return.
Thank you very much!