帮忙改一篇英语作文

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帮忙改一篇英语作文
我英语很烂,请大家帮忙指出语法错误、用词不当之处,最好能讲一讲怎么改比较好
It is very lucky for me to pass the test.But I am still happy that I passed it.Now I have more time doing something I love to do.I made a goal for myself.I hope I can achieve it before Septermber.
Yesterday my teacher asked me to make a PPT to introduce why my grade improved so quickly.When I was talking,i was very nervous because I hardly ever talk to so many people.Suddenly,I saw Tina was staring at me with a encouraged smile.I had confidence to myself.I finished the introdution and won a burst of applause.
After the talk,I thanked Tina and we became friends as well.

.Now I have more time doing something I love to do.应改为.Now I have more time to do something I love .before Septermber应该为by Septermber 其实encouraged也可以 不过改成hortative更好I hardly ever talk...请问怎么用美句,如何收集美句呢》

我以前有同学看到一句收集一句 记下来过几天背一遍 过几天背一遍 其实我觉得 不如百度一下 这种句子在精不在多 要看到有用的 多背 一定要用在作文里 用个几次就Practice makes perfect了

附件里是我以前背的 希望对你有用