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many buildings are appearing in large numbers ,some people believe that we should build our buildings in traditional styles.to what extent do you agree or disagree
Nowdays ,a wide various of morden buildings have appeared significantly and instand of numerous famous ancient buildings .some people think that engineers should construct the achitecture in a traditional way ,this arguments may be true .in different countries ,ancient buildings and the taditional architecture styles are the symbol to reveal their countries’culture and custom .such as the pyramids for the mystery of ancient Egyptian.
Also,those mysterious architectures will be announced on the television or broadcast .as a result of it ,numerous tourisms would like to have a travel there.so they can communicate information with located people .furthermore substantial travlings will improved local arears’ economy dramatically .importantly,if real-estate company composed demolishing some old house where the elderly people lived,maybe it is a tensive situation between them ,which will make society chaotic.
On the other hand ,there are various aspects against these arguments .comparing with traditional building ,moden one is more simplicity and practicality .we also enjoy the morden atmosphere comfortably in some morden hotels .moreover,since innovation is a spirit for a city and nations ,so designer not only select the moden structure meterials ,but also shift the building style.
In addition ,just like BA london Eye structure among many ancient buildings ,such as the Big Ben and Parliament House,also is a fascinating structural styles.Maybe it will attract more tourisms to have a trip there.
In conclusion ,no matter what kinds of structures which could bring lots of advantages for us .Furthermore ,government has a responsibility to keep a balance between new and old ,also architecture would better to assumulate the essense in ancient structure styles.
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