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Ever since I have had many wishes,such as teachers,doctors,guide,the headmaster,scientists...And so on.But I think my biggest wish or do a ordinary kindergarten teachers.
I want to be a kindergarten teacher,when a can give children warm teacher,when one can teach them how to be a person of teacher,when one can teach their native language teachers.
Teacher is a very great professional and a make a person very rewarding and happy career,I would to realize her wish to try hard!
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我从小到大有过很多愿望,比如说教师,医生,导游,校长,科学家...等等.可是我想我最大的愿望还是做一名普普通通的幼儿园教师.
我想当个幼儿园教师,当一个能给予孩子温暖的教师,当一个能教他们怎么做人的教师,当一个能教他们母语的教师.
教师是一个很伟大的职业,又是一个让人很有成就感,又是开心的职业,我会为了实现自己的愿望而努力!

Ever since 是从那以后,不是从小到大,可以用From an early age.
wish一般侧重于祝福类的希望和愿望,这里用dream比较合适
列举同类事物,用逗号隔开时,形式要一致,要么都是单数,要么都是复数,要么都是being,要么都是to do
And so on 不应该大写,应该代替省略号跟在列举的句子末尾
or do a ordinary kindergarten teachers要改成is being an ordinary kindergarten teacher或者is to be an ordinary kindergarten teacher(有了a就不能再加s了,ordinary前面用an不是a)
one who can give children warmness,one who can teach them how to act properly,one who can teach them native language(用定语从句应该是这样写,另外“做人”不能直译,那是中式英语)
Teacher is a very great profession which makes people have a sense of achievement and feel happy .I would like to try my best to realize my dream !