希望有英文好的老师帮帮我修改一下我自己写的一个小段,是用来做论据用的关于Rosa Park的.
希望有英文好的老师帮帮我修改一下我自己写的一个小段,是用来做论据用的关于Rosa Park的.
In
1955,there was a black woman standing
up to be the first person to fight for black’s rights.She was Rosa Parks,who
refused to obey the bus driver’s order that gave up here seat to make room for
a white passenger.Rosa Parks was arrested because of her resistance to the
society’s rules.At that time,blacks
were discriminated and their positions were low and ignored.Rosa Park’s brave
resistance made society thought the segregating problems considerately.Finally
the boycott ended when the Supreme Court ruled that the segregation laws on the
buses were illegal.Rosa
Parks inspired MLK and others to protest
for equal rights in American.She was remembered for standing up for what she
believed inspiring others to change the world for better.
第三行有一处打错,是gave up her seat.
希望可以帮忙改改除了语法问题,还有深度问题,就是论证的时候还加些什么比较好
1.Rosa Park’s brave resistance made society thought the segregating problems considerately这个句子里 thought 应该换成think因为前面是make 引导的
2.倒数第二个长句 American应该换成America 吧?
这是我看到的比较明显的地方希望采纳…总得来说写得不错啊啊，这些是小错误，我当时当机了。可能帮忙看看句子整体的改法吗 我觉得‘‘Rosa Parks was arrested because of her resistance to thesociety’s rules.‘’这句很中式英文啊。。。。就是想要句子简练点，一个句子包括多点信息点这个句子的话 Rosa Parks was arrested forher resistance to thesociety’s rules 。用个句型吧。 第一句the first person换成一个词 pioneer 也就是先驱之类的意思文章会简洁一点吧不知道你在读几年级 也不清楚是写什么样的文章 不过我觉得这个论据还蛮长的 可以删掉一些只保留重点内容