哪位能帮忙点评一篇托福作文

哪位能帮忙点评一篇托福作文
(what is more important for a student,understand ideas and concepts or understand facts)
Ideas and concepts are not independent to the facts,they are connected with facts.Facts are related with ideas and concepts,ideas and concepts cannot exist without facts.However,I think while learning,it is more important for students to learn ideas and concepts.
It is true that concepts and ideas cannot live without facts,but if you do not have a concept or idea to about a fact,you cannot understand what the fact is.
For example,in every place at every time,whatever a object move,it will land on the ground finally,but for many years people do not know why the objects are forced to the downward direction.This situation had never changed until Newton began to research the movement of objects and suggested three laws of moving of objects.After the concept of force makes object move and the gravity,people began to understand many facts of moving among objects.If there were no research of the movement,the idea of gravity,force will not come out,people will not able to understand why we can make things move and why the apples fall down from trees.
Not only we cannot understand a fact without concept,but also sometime we are not able to find the fact without the guidance of ideas and concepts.Since people began to research theoretical physics,people have been interested in how the mass of object comes.People think there is a mechanism endue the object mass,and this thing can be found,but people have no idea on how to prove it.Fortunately,some scientists like Peter Higgs predicted there must a side product during this mechanism happen.According to this idea,scientists are able to develop a concept and method to detect these products to prove the theory of mechanism.If there are no idea and concept about the predicted product,people may need many decades to find another way to understand the fact on how the mechanism endues mass to an object,and the development of theoretical physics may bog down.
On students in the terms of studying,the importance of understanding ideas and concepts first is obvious,without ideas and concepts,it is difficult for students to understand many facts which are happening around them.So in my standing point,I think it is more important for students to understand ideas and concepts first.