我写了一篇作文,谁帮我看看,找些错误(我才初一啊)

我写了一篇作文,谁帮我看看,找些错误(我才初一啊)
I have a dream
When l am boy,l want to be an astronaut.I think it is very interesting and funny.but now I am diffident,I think it is too hard.I have not any hope.So I have a new dream:I will be an economist.Mybe you are surpised why I want to be an economist.let me tell you:In winter hoilday,I read a book (货币战争).It talks about the economics’s history and fact.It is really interesting and exciting.But it is too depth and mybe you will be a poorman.I read this book all hoilday,it is give me the true way to the confidence.And it is also difficult.But I do not give up.I think I will be a good economist.Beause that is my favourite job.When I have a dream,it can tell me how to be success.So at the first I will study in XiaMen University or RenMin University then I will go abroad to learn more.Next,I will work in a bank to be a richman .At last I will work at Wall Street.I will make my life colorful,that is my last dream.I look forward to the future with confidence.