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IN MANY COUNTRIES,TRADITIONAL FOODS ARE BEING REPLACED BY INTERNATIONAL FAST FOOD.THIS IS HAVING A NEGATIVE EFFECT ON BOTH FAMILIES AND SOCIETIES.TO WHAT EXTENT DO YOU AGREE OR DISAGREE?
Social researchers frequently argue that eating international fast food would not be essential for the improvement of society.The question,however,remains:what would be the real effect,on the individual and on society,of international fast food?In fact,some studies conclude that people can not achieve better if they eat fast food,also more than this is detrimental to their own body.
There are two areas of concern that must be addressed in assessing any proposal to it,the healthy impact and impact on society.The most important point to stress is that,admittedly,traditional food may lead to some side effects.Fortunately,the negative effects of traditional food can be mitigated,through sensitive development and the support of government,traditional food in many places are participating in a sustainable food economy via traditional restaurants,food companies.
However,traditional food costs far more than it benefits.One of the most frequent arguments heard against is that often large sums of money and large amounts of time are needed,so significant capital investment and limited time may be wasted.The spending and time are concentrated in traditional food rather than other meaningful activities,or being put into providing for basic needs.
In conclusion,from what we have discussed above,we can see that both sides have their strong points.And what makes traditional food so effective for people?The advantages of traditional food fall into two categories:above everything else ,traditional food brings a sustainable food economy ,last but not least,traditional food are more healthy than international fast food.