帮我看看这篇文章,是我自己写的,有什么不对的,请改正,谢啦.This year's winter is very different,because this year's winter so beautiful.From January the 18th,snow began to fall.Go where,we can see everything is putting on a coat.What colour is it?Of course is white!Open the window,looking at changxing,feel that everything is so beautiful.每一处有错误的地方请指出来,并且讲清楚原因,而且要改正,
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帮我看看这篇文章,是我自己写的,有什么不对的,请改正,谢啦.
This year's winter is very different,because this year's winter so beautiful.From January the 18th,snow began to fall.Go where,we can see everything is putting on a coat.What colour is it?Of course is white!Open the window,looking at changxing,feel that everything is so beautiful.
每一处有错误的地方请指出来,并且讲清楚原因,而且要改正,
答
1.this year's winter 不准确,汉语式.说成this year就可以了,或者 winter of this year／ 2.第二个this year就用it代替.／ 3.From January the 18th,从11月18号开始,这是一个时间段,不能用短暂动词began,可以说it ha...