自己写的一个句子帮忙修改下错误 汉语意思和英文在补充中 如果问题太多可以写个句子表达相同的意思
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自己写的一个句子帮忙修改下错误 汉语意思和英文在补充中 如果问题太多可以写个句子表达相同的意思
The undergraduates are joining the army from 10% in 2004 to 20% in 2011,according to a survey by professor Chen Hong of Tsinghua university,published from Tsinghua science and technology.
一项出版在清华学报上的由陈宏教授进行的调查显示,在校大学生参加数量由2004年的10%提升到2011年的20%
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according to a survey by professor Chen Hong of Tsinghua university,published from Tsinghua science and technology.
这部分基本没什么问题主要是前一部分的
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The number ofcollege graduates whojoin the armyhas been risen from 10% in 2004 to 20% in 2011,according to a survey published at Tsinghua science and technology,which is conducted by a professor...