帮忙检查英语语法错误!

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帮忙检查英语语法错误!
Large-scale development of China's western region as "15" key element of the plan,its implementation will be a long,arduous process.The western region development of the capital market is existing problems.And it will give rise to huge constraints towards the China's economic development.This paper focuses on the current China headquarters in the capital market(西部地区资本市场现状),analysis of the current situation and improve from the western capital markets,deepening the reform of the financial system,strengthening the concept of innovation、system innovation,improve relevant policies and regulations,and other western perspective on China's capital market development and improve the proposed countermeasures.
帮忙检查下是否有什么语法错误,并改正!

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The large-scale development of China's western region has "15" key elements in the plan,its implementation will be a long,arduous process.The western region development of the capital market has existing problems,and will give rise to huge constraints towards the China's economic development.This paper focuses on the current China headquarters in the capital market(西部地区资本市场现状),analysis of the current situation and improvement from the western capital markets,deepening the reform of the financial system,strengthening the concept of innovation、system innovation,improve relevant policies and regulations,and other western perspectives on China's capital market development and improve the proposed countermeasures.