大家帮我看看这篇作文有什么语法错误,急用!

大家帮我看看这篇作文有什么语法错误,急用!
Growing jobs
What sort of jobs will people be doing ten years from now?With the development of the society,many new jobs have appeared recently and show the trend of risking.There are some new jobs as follow.
Professional bargain’s man(职业砍价人)：save money for you.
Many people are often ripped off by cunning shopkeeper,making consumer’s rights and interests are infringed.Which make people are afriad of shopping,but now you can buy something with bargain’s man to avoid falling in the pitfall that has been fixed up by shopkeeper.Bargain’s man can make people buy something in a low price.If you want to be a professional bargain’s man,you should have good eloquence.
Private tailor（私人裁缝）:dress you different.
There are many clothes shops in the street,but people want to have a private tailor.Because private tailor can design clothes which can show client’s charm for client.Private talior can earn two thousand yuan after finish designing a suit.So if you receive five order forms every month,you will be rich in the future.
Some new jobs seen to be easier,but they are also similar to traditional jobs,making you feel tired.In my opinion,no matter which job you do,physical fitness,outgoing personality and excellent eloquence are more important.
顺便帮我看看哪里可以换更好的句型,只要意思不变就可以,做得好的有加分,