老师.我想问一下这篇英语文章有语病吗

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老师.我想问一下这篇英语文章有语病吗
Hello everybody.My name is Chen xin.I am a student of Grade 8.I am a lovely and outgoing girl and I am so welcomed by my friends and my classmates.
I like comedy.I think they are funny and interesting.I often go to the movies with my friends on weekends.I can paint and have won many prizes in the competitions.I take piano class once a week.It is a little hard for me but I am very happy .I want to be a great manager one day..I also like reading .I like English and Chinese at school.and I'm good at English.This is me.
Thank you!
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第二段第一句话可以做适当的补充,“funny”改成“fun”比较好,funny一般是说像小丑那样的带点比较搞怪的意思.另外funny和interesting有点重复,可以把其中一个改成relaxing之类的.paint一般指油画之类的大型作品,最好改成draw.而且大家都会draw,所以最好加个well之类的修饰词.many prizes里的many最好改成some kinds of,prize和award应该用“种类”这样的词修饰,many太中式了.还是这句话,the改成different,其实无所谓.上钢琴课那句和上一句之间过渡地不太自然,加一句I also can play the piano and……but I am very happy 在am后面加个still.great manager改成brilliant manager更好些.I likeEnglish and Chinese at school,这句话意思不太明确,如果不好改可以删了.this is me,这句话还可以,因为本来就是自我介绍,that's all一般是其他的演讲或讲话之类的用.不过最好加个So,更自然些.
大家说的都挺好的,你自己综合整理一下,按你自己的想法改动 :-D